Comments on: Two Girls -UPDATED

By: Kameron Hurley

Kameron Hurley — Mon, 09 Nov 2009 19:18:58 +0000

Thanks! Yeah, the story version kind of goes on and on with the "THIS IS ABOUT POLITICS! ISN'T THIS A TERRIBLE ISSUE! LOOK AT THIS!" whereas the "film" is… well, more about the story and less of bash-you-over-the-head parable.

It was fun stripping away the crap and figuring out what the story was actually about.

By: Kris

Kris — Sun, 08 Nov 2009 06:06:59 +0000

That was really, really good, even though you've mentioned it needs some tweaking. I found it more accessible than the short story – perhaps because some content had been edited out. Thanks for sharing your work.

By: Kameron Hurley

Kameron Hurley — Fri, 30 Oct 2009 19:11:59 +0000

Yeah, I think all of the transitions still happen too fast. I'm working on telling stories with less text, more images. It's a rough shift from one medium to another.

By: Debra L Martin

Debra L Martin — Fri, 30 Oct 2009 17:17:17 +0000

Hi Kameron,

That was very cinematic and powerful. A very sad tale...

My only comment on the video is there is one part in the middle where there is a lot of text - too much to read before the transition.

All in all, a job well done.

Deb